Friday, 1 May 2020

my story

W.A.L.T write a made up story it could be what ever you want it just has to be be interesting this is my story. once in a deep dark forest lived a young girl she was 5 years old she was there all by her self since she was three her parents left her there because they did not like her all there was in the forest was bananas growing on tress and clean water  by a river till a person came along and asked what are you doing here by your self she was actually a really dangerous lady so she gave her a cup of tea the girl dident know if she wanted to drink it because she did not know the lady but then she drank it then the next day she was never found again. the end.
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2 comments:

  1. Mrs Rooney1 May 2020 at 11:19

    Thats a sad story Harper. You have used lots of descriptive words. I liked deep dark forest.
    Next time you might like to add some full stops. They would make it easier to read. Kepp up the good work.

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  2. Miss Pownall4 May 2020 at 09:47

    Well done for including a W.A.L.T Harper.
    This is a story full of mystery. Mrs Rooney has pointed out your fullstops and i think that would be a very good focus for your next story. Well done for all of your hard work. Miss Pownall

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